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It's genius, but what else is new. Nitpicks away! The Seattle Ducks are amphibious vehicles. They can drive on land, and serve as a boat. People go on tours of ...

Holy Crap. Good job as usual. A few nitpicks. Losing all of my rational thought, I walked under the branches of the biggest willow tree. For some reason, "losing," doesn't ...

I know you don't want nitpicks, but they make the best editors. I really liked this, though it did admittedly confuse me because I'm not really up to date on ...

This is a really funny idea. I can tell that you sat down with the actual Harry Potter book and parodied the first chapter sentence by sentence. If that's not ...

I really like the concept. It's like the opposite of all of John Donne's poems that are basically him begging for sex. This song focuses on a healthy relationship rather ...

Good job again. Just watch your past and present tense; they need to be consistent. Here are a few things I noticed. It was all too surreal for her fathom, ...

It's a cool concept, but you need to consider both what you're trying to say and how you say it. You might want a bit more basis. It just all ...

Looks like somebody's beat me to the nitpicking, but I'd still like to let you know what I think. It was really good, but I honestly didn't realize George was ...

Good job. It's a great idea! You might be able to refine it a bit more, but you've got an amazing story to work with. If you want to turn ...

This a really interesting concept. It's something that you could run with and what's cool about it is that this could actually happen right under our noses and we wouldn't ...

Wow. I'm really blown away by this. It's wonderfully descriptive and very stirring. I'm a little confused about what you keep referring to as Jeremaid's Disease, but I could just ...

I can tell it's really beautiful, but I can't say that I got it. I feel like you need to make your meaning more clear. There are a lot of ...

Great job again! You have a really good descriptive flair. Comparing the lake to silk is one example. You might want to, in places, substitute commas for periods and vice ...

I like the idea. You write really well and since it's in first person, it's like a continuous stream of thoughts. A few things that I noticed were that you ...

I didn't actually get through the entire thing, but here are some of the things I notice from what I did read. You might want to separate your sentences more ...